[Tortwag]

Hi there, folks! Name's Shell Master Tortwag, but I guess you can go ahead and call me Tortwag for short - the full title is there only 'cause I love shelled-reptiles.
Don't mind my weirdness.

Putting that aside, welcome to my topic! You see, ever since I heard about the first annual Talent Show on this forum, I thought that it was the perfect way for me to try and be active on this community for a while. So, I decided to write a piece for it, and I'm currently waitin' for the results. Unfortunately, I didn't have the time to finish what I had planned (or even re-read/correct all of the mistakes), but I'm still satisifed with what I've done.

So much, in fact, that I've decided to share it here, with the rest of the community. I plan for Klonoa: Crusaders of Pugiland to be a full-fledged Klonoa spin-off, and I even have a sequel in mind, though I'll get into that later. I'm not sure about the pace of my work however (1 writing piece a week? 1 every two weeks? Depends on my free time), but in any case, here is the first chapter I mean Vision done for this work. Enjoy!


Vision 1-1: The beginning of combats

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Vision 1-2: Silvan Maze of the Devil's Bard

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Vision 1-3: Lilyacoo's Ark

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Vision 1-4: Horizons of Lunshyr and Lilyacoo

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Vision 2-1: Challenges of the past and present

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Vision 2-2: Hoist the colors of adventure!

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Vision 2-3: Enter the Gourmet Blade

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Vision 2-4: Memories of past encounters

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Vision 2-5: Time of Crisis

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[Questklonoa]

Impressive :3

[Tortwag]

@questriolu  First off, You're getting a + Wahoo, because that baseball-clothing Klonoa Avvie is amazing XD

Second, thank you I'm glad you're already enjoying this. Vision 1-2 should be out by the end of the week, since I just need to correct it.

[Graystripe2000]

@questriolu  First off, You're getting a + Wahoo, because that baseball-clothing Klonoa Avvie is amazing XD

It's from a Japan-only IOS baseball game called Famista Dream Match.

[Tortwag]

@Windbullet Ah. Welp, the more you know! Thanks for the info

[BinaryPulsar]

awesome! i really enjoyed this!

i may not be the best writer, but i have a talent for spotting a good fanfic when i see one, and this certainly is a great one!

i can't wait to read more!

i'm also curious as to why Huepow is in this world. and i'm curious to other characters. and i'm curious to this spooky scary forest they're in

*curiosity intensifies*

[Tortwag]

@BinaryPulsar Hey there, thanks for stopping by too Glad you're enjoying this Fanfiction so far. I do hope this'll be great, so stya tuned! More where that came from :3

Oh, that. Heh. You'll get your answer soon enough

[SyraxAxoJaxco]

Hmm...what to say about this fanfic...let's see.

1. [b]Your talent[/b] on writing [b]is really shown[/b] in this fanfic. I mean, i usually don't want to spill too much 'water' in a chapter (and my grammar is still suck, btw :v), that's why i always keep my chapter under 1.5k words. But, yours with 2k [b]makes me wonder[/b] what will be available in the store~ :)

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2. [b]Feline bandits[/b]...is it only me who thinks that [b]Janga[/b] will be in the story?? :|

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3. [b]Jyss[/b]...i don't know why you choose that name, since (obviously) it sounds like '[b]jizz[/b]'... :unsure:

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4. If you describe [b]the bandits' appearance[/b], why don't you explain [b]Jyss' appearance[/b] too?
[spoiler=And more..](Dunno, but i'm imagining  Jyss as a, red fox? :embarassed:)

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5. [b]Emerlight[/b]...Emerald Light? Nice~ ;) *noSarcasmIntended

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Continue on your writing, sir "Shell Master Tortwag"(:v). I will try to give my opinions for every chapter you make. I'm really looking forward to this story~

I really recommend you to write [i]at least[/i] 500 words per day. That way, your motivation in writing won't turned off. [size=5pt]Well, this died-motivation thing happened to me... T T[/size]
[spoiler]Tor[b][i]swag[/i][/b]...................[i][b]AMIRITE??[/b][/i] XD

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[Voka~Daemyn]

This was a nice read so far.

[Tortwag]

@SyraxAxoJaxco Hey there! Please allow me to call you Syrax if possible. In any case, thanks a ton for your comments. Let's see what I can do with 'em!

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There ya go!


@Voka~Daemyn Thank you! I'm glad you found it enjoyable already - hopefully the other Visions will be just as nice, if not better than this one. Stay tuned!